Ah, well, the long gap in posts is in this case an indicator of GOOD THINGS! I’ve been working very hard on all kinds of your projects. Today I finished a document for my eighth client since October 1.
Make every word pull its weight. (Sometimes the right noun can deliver both meaning and tone; the perfect verb may eliminate the need for an adverb.). Don’t skimp on clarity. Every sentence must make sense and work together with the other sentences to make logical paragraphs.
A difficult concept to grasp, second only to narrative point of view, may be filtering. I never felt connected with any character in Jack’s* manuscript.
Revision is not proofreading or copyediting. Revision is not accessing the thesaurus and subbing in big words. God no. Revision sometimes involves a restructuring of an entire manuscript.
Jack* is a writer without any education in the craft of writing. He has inspiration, talent, and time, and has composed a strong story. Good plot, good conflict, good resolution.